Enrique x Rishi
SEMI-FORMAL REWRITE
You are the leader of three hundred troops going against the biggest army the world has ever seen. How will you acquire the trust and commitment of your people to fight alongside you in the worst of times? Persuasion. Persuasion is not easy to come by, luckily for you, just a hundred years ago in Greece, Aristotle came up with three simple tools for persuasion: ethos, logos, and pathos. With these tools, convincing people even in the direst of times becomes an easy task. Easy is an overstatement, but by the end of this training you will be an effective persuader. Suit up and grab your weapon as we march towards the understanding of persuasion.
First pick the most credible trainer for the called occasion. By the way, yes, that is your first tool, ethos. By placing yourself in a position where you rely on the person that is training you, you will become the greater warrior. Once a great scholar mentioned that we should learn what “we should and shouldn't do to survive in life” (Leon Manjyoume). This is war not the olympics, you are training for the sake of your life. Pick the more credible trainer and you will not only become better but in the future you will also become the credible leader.
Pick up that shield, there is no logic in fighting without a way to protect yourself. Logos, soldier, you need logic when you are fighting, there is no sense in learning from the most credible if you are not going to be logical with your choices. The shield represents a sign of maturity and understanding that without it, means imminent death. Without a shield an arrow to your knee will be the only picture that you will be remembered by. A sensible decision will allow you to last longer in the figurative world of war.
Do not pick just any sword, not just any sandal, but choose the ones that will win the heart of your army. Be the warrior that stirs up the mood of your army with the use of pathos. When your army is presented with the loss of hope let your shining armor and sword be the one to guide them. Pathos is found in those that are intangible by the threat of impending doom. Because they are the ones who do not give up in the eyes of loss when others tumble to their knees. But they are also the ones capable of restoring the moral of a team. Be the heart for people, and they will follow you.
Understand that this is all a metaphor for what can be applied to normal daily life (you do not have to be a warrior to accomplish persuasion). Your brain represents logos, your heart, pathos, and your words represent ethos. The secret to persuasion is working on yourself and the status that people perceive you by. Soldier, once you master persuasion, suit up and join the three hundred as we use our rhetorical devices professionally to defend our land.
First pick the most credible trainer for the called occasion. By the way, yes, that is your first tool, ethos. By placing yourself in a position where you rely on the person that is training you, you will become the greater warrior. Once a great scholar mentioned that we should learn what “we should and shouldn't do to survive in life” (Leon Manjyoume). This is war not the olympics, you are training for the sake of your life. Pick the more credible trainer and you will not only become better but in the future you will also become the credible leader.
Pick up that shield, there is no logic in fighting without a way to protect yourself. Logos, soldier, you need logic when you are fighting, there is no sense in learning from the most credible if you are not going to be logical with your choices. The shield represents a sign of maturity and understanding that without it, means imminent death. Without a shield an arrow to your knee will be the only picture that you will be remembered by. A sensible decision will allow you to last longer in the figurative world of war.
Do not pick just any sword, not just any sandal, but choose the ones that will win the heart of your army. Be the warrior that stirs up the mood of your army with the use of pathos. When your army is presented with the loss of hope let your shining armor and sword be the one to guide them. Pathos is found in those that are intangible by the threat of impending doom. Because they are the ones who do not give up in the eyes of loss when others tumble to their knees. But they are also the ones capable of restoring the moral of a team. Be the heart for people, and they will follow you.
Understand that this is all a metaphor for what can be applied to normal daily life (you do not have to be a warrior to accomplish persuasion). Your brain represents logos, your heart, pathos, and your words represent ethos. The secret to persuasion is working on yourself and the status that people perceive you by. Soldier, once you master persuasion, suit up and join the three hundred as we use our rhetorical devices professionally to defend our land.
Screen cast video analysis
FIRST READ THE ESSAY'S IN ORDER. THEN WATCH THE VIDEO AS IF YOU WERE RISHI - ENRIQUE
FORMAL COMPARE AND CONTRAST ESSAY
Here I will be discussing Rishi’s work, what I found exemplary, what I changed in his essay, and the learning that I got from his work.
Rishi has the ability to captivate his audience with the utmost skill. As he mentions his role in his group, he is the master of transition hooks. What I find exceptional from his writing is his straightforwardness. He is quick to praise Leon, (the person he is writing his essay on), but he is also quick to criticize Leon’s work. I believe that this style of writing promises better results because meaning is not lost as it would be if it was written with flowery language. Although I mentioned that Rishi was direct to the point in his writing, he is able to manipulate the essay to fit his personality. Rishi, as far as I know him, is a person with a lot of humor and has the extraordinary skill to put a smile on people’s face at any time of the day. Inevitably his humor makes its way to his essays. By no means is this bad, on the contrary it makes essay reading/editing a lot more enjoyable. His humorous imagination helped me rewrite an essay that clearly shows his personality.
As you may have realized my revision of Rishi’s essay is actually a rewritten version of what I think Rishi would have written. My rewritten essay does not comply with the original assignment, since I have little knowledge of the essay that Rishi criticized. I do not intend to disrespect Rishi’s exemplary work, but instead provide my expanded perspective on parts of the essay that I was attracted to. Obviously I could have just edited words in his essay to make it sound more professional or have done it another way. Either be it through grammatical revisions or creating a piece on an outstanding part of an essay. It’s all about perspective. My belief for revising his work was expanding on his creative side of his essay. That aside, I did keep same theme and it is well presented in my revision. My goal in the revision is to express Rishi’s personality through rhetorical devices. While reading his essay I figured that Rishi was like a beast caged from unleashing his true potential. Rishi’s humorous character would be presented at the beginning of a paragraph but at the end his energy is transferred to completing his assigned work. I felt like his writing for many parts of his essay was for the grade, instead of letting his creativity loose. Which completely makes sense because this was an assignment that was later on graded. I took his creativity that was undermined and created an essay that matches his creativity. As you will see in my writing I missed out on the specifics of Greek mythology but I compensated it with mentions of war and the concept of fighting. From my previous studies of Greek mythology the concept of fighting and excelling through the means of violence is prevalent in many stories. I applied this main theme of Greek mythology in my revised essay of Rishi’s work.
I had two phases of learning in this project. First was understanding Rishi’s point of view, and the second was being enlightened by the actual truth of the assignment. Rishi’s essay reminded me of some methods that I had forgotten due to exposure of different kinds of writing. Rishi has a tone of happiness and excitement seen in younger people his age. As people grow older I believe this form of writing is lost due to social pressures of maturing. But due to this change, if someone (of an older age) were to write the way Rishi writes it would come out as completely unique. I felt that Rishi indirectly but with good intent, taught me that thinking as a younger student allows for better writing in terms of getting the attention from an audience. My second learning came when I saw Louis’s example of the screencast video. He did his video in advance, and consequently Mr. Pangier posted his work on google classroom as an example for everyone to see. I learnt that I only had to change a few grammatical errors and add more meaning to the essay I was reviewing. Instead of restarting from the beginning, I followed up on my work of rewriting Rishi’s essay. I did not do this because I was lazy to restart, but I figured since Rishi’s essay was chosen for being exemplary by Mr. Pangier it should remain that way. And by making that choice I was able to write an essay on an aspect of Rishi’s essay that I found very intriguing, the adventurous side. I feel like this way the audience can learn more about Rishi’s personality while keeping his original work intact.
My work is unique to other assignments seen in the project of ‘Learning From Others’, but learning is also unique to everybody and approaching work with different perspectives is the best way to learn from others.
Rishi has the ability to captivate his audience with the utmost skill. As he mentions his role in his group, he is the master of transition hooks. What I find exceptional from his writing is his straightforwardness. He is quick to praise Leon, (the person he is writing his essay on), but he is also quick to criticize Leon’s work. I believe that this style of writing promises better results because meaning is not lost as it would be if it was written with flowery language. Although I mentioned that Rishi was direct to the point in his writing, he is able to manipulate the essay to fit his personality. Rishi, as far as I know him, is a person with a lot of humor and has the extraordinary skill to put a smile on people’s face at any time of the day. Inevitably his humor makes its way to his essays. By no means is this bad, on the contrary it makes essay reading/editing a lot more enjoyable. His humorous imagination helped me rewrite an essay that clearly shows his personality.
As you may have realized my revision of Rishi’s essay is actually a rewritten version of what I think Rishi would have written. My rewritten essay does not comply with the original assignment, since I have little knowledge of the essay that Rishi criticized. I do not intend to disrespect Rishi’s exemplary work, but instead provide my expanded perspective on parts of the essay that I was attracted to. Obviously I could have just edited words in his essay to make it sound more professional or have done it another way. Either be it through grammatical revisions or creating a piece on an outstanding part of an essay. It’s all about perspective. My belief for revising his work was expanding on his creative side of his essay. That aside, I did keep same theme and it is well presented in my revision. My goal in the revision is to express Rishi’s personality through rhetorical devices. While reading his essay I figured that Rishi was like a beast caged from unleashing his true potential. Rishi’s humorous character would be presented at the beginning of a paragraph but at the end his energy is transferred to completing his assigned work. I felt like his writing for many parts of his essay was for the grade, instead of letting his creativity loose. Which completely makes sense because this was an assignment that was later on graded. I took his creativity that was undermined and created an essay that matches his creativity. As you will see in my writing I missed out on the specifics of Greek mythology but I compensated it with mentions of war and the concept of fighting. From my previous studies of Greek mythology the concept of fighting and excelling through the means of violence is prevalent in many stories. I applied this main theme of Greek mythology in my revised essay of Rishi’s work.
I had two phases of learning in this project. First was understanding Rishi’s point of view, and the second was being enlightened by the actual truth of the assignment. Rishi’s essay reminded me of some methods that I had forgotten due to exposure of different kinds of writing. Rishi has a tone of happiness and excitement seen in younger people his age. As people grow older I believe this form of writing is lost due to social pressures of maturing. But due to this change, if someone (of an older age) were to write the way Rishi writes it would come out as completely unique. I felt that Rishi indirectly but with good intent, taught me that thinking as a younger student allows for better writing in terms of getting the attention from an audience. My second learning came when I saw Louis’s example of the screencast video. He did his video in advance, and consequently Mr. Pangier posted his work on google classroom as an example for everyone to see. I learnt that I only had to change a few grammatical errors and add more meaning to the essay I was reviewing. Instead of restarting from the beginning, I followed up on my work of rewriting Rishi’s essay. I did not do this because I was lazy to restart, but I figured since Rishi’s essay was chosen for being exemplary by Mr. Pangier it should remain that way. And by making that choice I was able to write an essay on an aspect of Rishi’s essay that I found very intriguing, the adventurous side. I feel like this way the audience can learn more about Rishi’s personality while keeping his original work intact.
My work is unique to other assignments seen in the project of ‘Learning From Others’, but learning is also unique to everybody and approaching work with different perspectives is the best way to learn from others.